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 Post subject: The Painting (comments)
PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2012 9:33 am 
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Tried to make another kinda spooky story. Hope you enjoy.


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 Post subject: Re: The Painting (comments)
PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2012 12:52 pm 
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A good DA would make sure to destroy that painting, where he could see. Even easier conviction than with just the evidence.


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PostPosted: Fri Jul 13, 2012 3:10 pm 
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Heh, I suppose so. Unless it's already too late...


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 Post subject: Re: The Painting (comments)
PostPosted: Fri Jul 13, 2012 9:22 pm 
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Good writing, I really enjoyed that 8-)

I spotted a mistake on the line "I’d tired hobbies," It should be "I'd tried hobbies," and then because I was looking I spotted a couple of others around it: I think you dropped an 's' in "I’d sketch gliders and spaceship " and you have an extra point in "but landscapes and people were much harder.."

At which point I became engrossed again and didn't notice anymore.


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 Post subject: Re: The Painting (comments)
PostPosted: Sun Jul 22, 2012 7:44 am 
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I wonder if by now the narrator is himself trapped in a painting. Here's hoping the miners draw some good lawyers for him?

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