Peeru Fanfic Comments

[Death 999]

Fixed. Also changed a few words here and there for clarity.

[Dabir]

"Moments later, Zev silently submitted a flight plan for the 1038 to dock with her vessel for transferring Cass, her equipment, and the six mycon. The whole operation was to take only thirteen minutes. [iWe had better be efficient about this![/i]"

Read it through anyway. I like where this is going.

[Niffiwan]

Just read through it, thanks! Progressing nicely as ever.

I am a bit confused by Cass's attitude, but I guess this is something that will become more clear.

A few notes:
"with various character happily" should be "with various characters happily"

"Zenick" should "Zelnick".

Zev could perhaps be added to the Peeru character reference.

[Death 999]

Nothing ready for Dec 1. I think Dec 15 is a go, though. I've had a crazy few weeks.

[Niffiwan]

Hello! How is it going?

[Death 999]

Almost dead. The winter came and with it, my energy. I sleep on the train instead of writing.

And moreover, I know where I want to get to, but I'm not sure what my next step should be.

[Niffiwan]

You know, just playing through the recently-released UQM-HD now... I realize that part of what makes this story so interesting is seeing the interactions of races who you don't actually see interact in the game. Pkunk + Druuge is one such combination. I must say that I'm really looking forward to seeing what the Pkunk and the Utwig have to say about each other, though... they have such similarities (ways of knowing the "truth" that others disbelieve and find silly, but nevertheless seem to work) as well as such fundamental differences in temperament and philosophy.

I don't know if that will come up at some point in the story, but it will be neat if it does.

[Zeracles]

"I'm surprised you're being so... nice to them."

Cass shook her head. "Is erasing their identity and infantilizing them really nice?

I wonder whether dropping any Mycon into the furnace could lead to tension that dents the onboard spirit.

I'm not saying a novel set in the SC-verse couldn't be popular. I'm just saying, I did not design Peeru with that in mind, and as such it would not function in that role. If SC were wildly popular, I would like it no less. I would love it. But this is not a viable mechanism for achieving that.

I think this is right, the writing is fine but I suspect Peeru would be very hard to adapt for a broader audience.

One trivial note on the tags -

me[/i] down). But will he learn that?[/i]

[Death 999]

I wonder whether dropping any Mycon into the furnace could lead to tension that dents the onboard spirit.

Naturally, but she has that all planned out. Her 'story' can accommodate casualties.


Oh oops. I just realized that I left out the Arcturus portal. Quick adjustment there.

[Zeracles]

Nice, well-constructed bit of melee as usual. One might have expected the Arilou to step up . . . or maybe not. In any case this should be good for Peeru's standing!

Some of the italicised bits aren't closed properly.